如何写好中考英语作文(一)

2013-05-25 16:20:11 中考英语作文

  如何写中考英语作文(附点评)

  命题作文即给出一个统一的题目,限定考生写作的具体范围,要求考生就同一主题展开叙述或评论。写好命题作文的关键是紧扣主题、立意明确、观点清晰。

  命题作文

  [例1]To be a lovely Shanghainese(2003年上海市英语中考题)

  审题:该题的重点在于阐述作为一个可爱的上海人,我们关键应怎样做?在2003年的考生作文中,有一部分同学发生了严重的偏题,把描述重点放在形容上海是怎样的一个大都市,因此失分很多。由此看来,审题的准确是非常重要的。

  学生作文:Shanghai is developing quickly everyday. Quite a few foreigners come to visit Shanghai. As the hosts of Shanghai, we must be lovely Shanghaineses to tell the visitors that Shanghai is an international city. To be a lovely Shanghainese, first, we should do our best to make the city more beautiful to show our enthusiasm. Next, we should be kind and friendly to everyone. We must do so to make our guests fell our zeal. Finally, we should study and work hard to rise our ability. Shanghai is developing and we should make progress to follow the epoch.

  教师评析:该篇作文行文流畅,结构清晰,以"first,Next,Finally"的结构描述,层次感很强。不定式的恰当运用体现了考生较好的语法功底。

  教师拟评分:9分

  [例2]Four years' school life

  审题:该题要求考生对四年的初中生活进行回顾和总结,适合以夹叙夹议的方式来写作。(此外,从情感教育的角度来看,阅卷老师总希望读到考生回忆自己美好、快乐的初中生活,而不是讨厌自己的母校、老师、同学等消极情绪的体现。)

  学生作文:I've been in my middle school for four years. Four years' school life plays an important role in my life. I enjoy making friends, getting knowledge and having interesting time in my school. I have also made friendship with lots of classmates, and I have also been taught different lessons by lots of different patient teachers. I have grown up a lot in the past four years. I will never forget my four years' school life.

  教师评析:整篇作文非常明快、流畅,体现了考生对母校依依不舍的情怀。由于是对初中生活的回顾和总结,考生恰当地选择以现在完成时作为主要的时态来强调影响和结果,文中'plays an important role'这一词组和被动语态的正确运用也体现了考生良好的词汇和语法功底。

  教师拟评分:10分

  中考英语作文题型分析与例文评析:应用文

  应用文写作

  应用文主要包括信函、电邮、日记、通知、广告、电话等形式,它要求考生不仅能表达题中的主要内容,还能够正确地运用各种文本格式进行规范的书写,这也是 考生对于英语传统文化了解多少的反映。因此,考生应在临考前系统地复习各种文本格式以及打电话的规范用语,以做到处变不惊、百战百胜。

  [例3]写一封信给你在云南省西双版纳市的笔友李帆,告诉他你很愿意与他交朋友,并邀请他到上海来旅行。

  审题:该题要求考生以规范的信件格式来书写,并把题中所出现的信息点都涵概在内。建议考生可把题目中的信息点都一一划出,以免发生遗漏。

  学生作文:

  Lifan

  Xishuangbanna Yunnan Province China May 25th, 2004

  Dear Lifan,

  Thank you for your letter. I'm glad to be your pen-friend. We are the same years old, but we were born in different places. In my imagination, Xishuangbanna is a very beautiful place. There are a lot of plants and animals. You know I look forward to visiting Xishuangbanna. Would you like to come to Shanghai? I'd like to invite you to Shanghai in summer holiday. Shanghai is also a beautiful place. It is a modern city. There are a lot of interesting places such as the Oriental Pearl TV Tower, the Bund, and Nanjing Road Walkway.

  If you come here, I will show you around Shanghai. You can live at my home and my mother will cook you much delicious food. Let's be best friends!

  Yours sincerely,

  Xiaomin

  教师拟评分:9分

  [例4]写一篇题为"A Visit To_____"的日记。

  审题:该题为半命题式作文。考生除了要注意运用正确的日记格式,还可根据自己的经验和熟悉程度来选择、确定文章的主题.

  学生作文:

  May 25th, 2004    sunny

  A Visit To Jinmao Building

  Jinmao Building has Chinese traditional styles and it is also modern. It is the signal construction of Shanghai. It is located in the center of Lujiazui Financial Area. Our family visited Jinmao Building today.

  The traffic there is very convenient. You can got here by tunnel and No.2 subway. And if you live near it, you can walk there just like our family. We went to the eighty-eighth floor of Jinmao Building. We saw the whole view of Shanghai there. Please come to Jinmao Building, and you will get some unexpected gains there.

  教师评析:整篇作文主题明确,对于金茂大厦的描述也较具体,文中"the signal construction"一词是全文的亮点。但整篇文章的层次不够清晰,句子也以简单句为主,对于参观这一动词的阐述还不够充分。

  教师拟评分:8分


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