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　　2014考研英语作文热门话题范文：堵车现象

　　As is indicated in the cartoon above,a big crowded of drivers stay in cars on the road,waiting for their turn to go,with patience almost running up(表达不准确且句子缺成分，根据图片可改为and even some people want to hold the car to go out of the long queue).In fact ,nowadays,this phenomenon reflected by the picture is so widespread,especially in super(super改为big，super表示“超级”，用在此处不合适)cities.Thanks to the fast development of economy,we have a chance to experience the more(去掉the more，rich为单音节形容词，其比较级直接在后面加-er即可) richer life.As a result of that,(第一句用thanks to表示原因，第二句用as a result of that也表示原因，这样有点繁琐，建议将两句话合为一句话，可改为and)the number of people who own cars is larger and larger.The once wide roads become narrow (汉语式英语，可改为The wide roads before become narrow now).In order to get to destination(改为destinations，每个人的目的地不一样，应用复数形式)on time,people have to set up (改为set out，set up意为“建立，创立”;set out为“出发”，注意短语的正确选择) earlier in case of being blocked.By the way ,discharging too much carbon-dioxide to the air would(改为will) destroy the environment.Therefore,it is imperative for us to take measures to change the fact.The simplest method is to diminish the times(改为time，time在表示“时间”时，为不可数名词，当“次数”讲时为可数名词) of using private transportations.There is no doubt the world would change into a better place for us to live benefited from all the efforts we devote.(汉语式英语，可改为There is no doubt that the world will be better for us to live in as long ...

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　　2014考研英语作文热门话题范文：因材施教

　　The duck mother, who is anxious and energetic, is begging the monkey teacher to teach her children the approach of climbing tree, which give(改为gives) him a fright. Conspicuously, that is a delicious(用词不当，delicious一般用来形容美食，故应去掉)ironic(改为an ironic)depiction concerning blind education,(加and，句子之间用连词连接)a phenomenon (句子缺谓语，加is)pervasive in contemporary society.This overwhelming, occupy with various kinds of irrational behaviors over children(句子表意不清，建议改为This overwhelmingly various kind of irrational behaviors), led(改为lead，句子时态应保持一致)us to conclude that the blind education is more of a devastation to children’s faculties than a reasonable practice. This kind of aimless education kids(加are，be exposed to为固定短语) exposed to tend to be in (去掉，be exposed to后面直接跟宾语)domestic situation, by, (此处by是什么意思?)unfortunately, their own parents, who exert great pressure on children’s already over-burdened small shoulder.(改为children’s over-burdened small shoulders) More ridiculously, many parents know that countless flaws are consist in this way of education and yet most did litter(改为little，litter意为“垃圾”) to change it. There are upsetting parallels today, as parents one wave after another force their little kids (加to,force sb. To do sth.)participate in various kinds of out-class courses(“课外课程”可表达为extra-curriculum courses)(注意句子顺序，改为as parents force their little kids to participate in various kin...

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　　2014考研英语作文热门话题范文：个性

　　In the picture above, there are four pencils but only one is adversed(该词表示“不友好的，不利的，相反的”，用于此处不恰当) which is(划线部分去掉) different from the others.Noticeably, there is a sentence read: (去掉)" don't be afraid to be different." in the middle (改为bottom，由图可知，那句话在图片底部而不是中间)of the photo. It is no doubt that the photographer wants us to respect the individuality.Steven Jobs, the representive(拼写错误，改为representative) of individulity(拼写错误，改为individuality), creates the brand Apple(改为Apple brand) and then prodominantes(拼写错误且词性使用错误，改为dominant) intellectual mobile phone market by its products. What makes his succeed(改为success，词性使用错误) is that he put the conception of individuality into his product--iphone,which contains so many appealing Apps and each one(建议改为it) is different from the ordinary (加ones，表示普通的手机). Therefore, he estabilished(拼写错误，改为establish) an empire of Apple and become famous for everyone around the world.Hence don't be afraid to be different because the individuality is valuabe(拼写错误，改为valuable) , which is the source of creativity. More importantly, it conributes(拼写错误，改为contributes) to the development of diversified world and the prosperity of culture and economy.

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　　文章构思不错，但其中的语法问题及词汇使用问题较多，而且，考研英语作文的字数要求为160-200，本篇文章的字数不够，望作者在以后的写作中能够注意;考研英语作文的写作模式作者基本上已经掌握，后面要做的就是加强语法、词汇，积累并模仿经典句子，不断提高自己的写作水平;再者，写完之后一定要认真检查，减少失分点。

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　　2014考研英语作文热门话题范文：过劳死

　　From the picture we can see a young father died on the patient bed for the sake of(建议改为because of，for the sake of一般用来表示“为了”，后常接目的状语) overwork and his wife is crying and mourning for him with extreme sadness,so it is with their child(改为so does their child).What a shocked scene and how thought provoking the phenomenon that the picture insinuates.What the picture intends to convey is the significance of the awareness of health.With the development of society,people commence to live in(改为live，live in表示“居住，住在”，后常跟地点状语) a life of a rapid rate(改为a fast-paced life).They almost have no time to do some entertainments other than work.In(去掉)hence,they don’t have enough time to get enough rest.(语义和前一句重复，可删除)Moreover,because of the life burden(改为burden of life),some husbands need to work hard to sustain their families.Some husbands even have more than one job and they are overwhelmed by the strains.Last but not least,some people don’t place an emphasis on their health and almost ignore it in daily lives(改为life，daily life为固定搭配).What they leave to their family members is grief.From my standpoint,it is imperative that effective measures should be taken to eliminate the phenomenon.For governments,they are supposed to make some accordingly policies to relieve the workers’ pressure.For workers,they must cultivate a good awareness of health and combine exertion and rest.

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　　2014考研英语作文热门话题范文：赡养父母

　　As is depicted in the picture,a poor old man,rolling like a football,is kicked between(改为among，注意between和among的区别，between表示在两者之间，among则表示在三者或三者以上之间) his three sons and daughter(改为a daughter).Unwilling to be responsible for their father ,the daughter and sons spare no effort to kick the old man as far as possible.We are irritated to see in the picture(建议放到句首或句末) the pathetic fact that these people go to any length to avoid surporting(拼写错误，改为supporting) their parents. Unfortunately, what we have seen in the picture isn't a rare phenomenon. However,what factor it is that results in this situation? (汉语式英语，改为what is the cause of this situation?) For one thing, in my opinion, the decreased importance attached to the moral education contributes to the lack of ethnic conception,leadiing (建议改为定语从句，which leads)to the consequence that paople(拼写错误，改为people) don 't esteem and(改为or，肯定句中用and，否定句中用or) value their parents . For another ,faced with the pressure of work and house installment ,young people can hardly make ends meet let alone taking good care of their old parents who is(改为are，定语从句的先行词为parents,从句中的谓语动词应用are) fragile to a sudden disease such as heart attack.There is no denying that further attention must be paid to the problem by the government .To handle this worsening situation,more money should be involed(拼写错误，改为involved) in the pension to guarantee the daily life of old people. In add...

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　　2014考研英语作文热门话题范文：招聘歧视

　　The undergraduate, who is on his way to a job interview, is stunned after hearing a ridiculous condition: the position is only for the man born in the year of dog. More ironically, a dog is eager to try. Conspicuously, that is a horrible depiction concerning the discrimination in job market.Over the past years, all kinds of discriminations(改为discrimination，它是一个不可数名词) have been condemned or made illegal, but one insidious form continue to thrive: some harsh conditions some employers imposed when recruit new,(句子成分不清，建议改为some harsh conditions are imposed on the employers when a company recruit new) ranging from height to household registration. So, what cause(改为causes) these problems? Firstly, thetremendous number of graduates- still mounting each year- make organizations powerless to screen out right candidates. (本句话说服力不够强)For which(改为this) reason, numerous bizarre approaches were came out to find “the right person”. Moreover, the current state of affairs may have been encouraged by lack of severe penalty and punishment to those arrogant organizations who(改为which) shrink the obligation of selecting eligible staff. A good case in point is one of my roommates, with excellent performance in the job interview, failed to obtain the occupation(本句话可改为who performs excellently in the job interview, but fails to obtain the occupation,若要按作者的写法，应该在failed之前加but，用来连接两个简单句，且将failed改为fail) as a conse...

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　　2014考研英语作文热门话题范文：志愿者

　　From the picture above we can see that there are three trees in the picture, and one of them is growing very strongly.(用一般现在时，且strongly运用不合适。可改为one of them grows very well) However, the other two trees (去掉)look like very small. If you take a(去掉) careful notice, you’ll find that a tree has become bend(bent) because of (去掉，因为后面是个句子)the big tree hostile his development. (the big tree holds back its growth)The drawer(drawer是抽屉的意思，painter) of the image aims at revealing a common phenomenon in our country, children today are generally spoiled. There are two major reasons for the problem. On one hand, as the reform of population policy, most families are allowed(加to have)only one child who is usually regarded as the ‘apple’ of parent’s(parents’) eye. Therefore, parents are always try (trying) their best to provide their child with everything they want. On the other hand, lacking the awareness of bearing hardships is also an important reason that can not be ignored.I think it is imperative that we should take some effective measures. To begin with, our government can modify the policy that allows families to raise more than one students(child). In addition, the most (加effective或者important之类的形容词) measure of all is that we should cultivate the sense of dependent. Only in this way, can we meliorate the problem in the near future.

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　　文章准确把握了试题的考察点，立意正确，内容较充实，有衔接，层次清楚，需注意以下问题：...

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　　2014考研英语作文热门话题范文：如此承诺

　　AS Is(注意大小写) shown above,a funny hen claimed that her eggs with(that后面应该跟的是从句，从句中应包含谓语动词，建议将with改为have) no edge and the like which is the most fundamntional(拼写错误，改为fundamental).(作者这句话是要表达什么内容?)Simple as the drawing is ,the symbolic meaning behind ti(改为it) is as deep as ocean(注意句末标点)The honest is not only necessary,but also indepensible(拼写错误，改为indispensable).As the old Chinese proverb says."Honest is gold."However,in no country other than China,it has been said that,the problum(拼写错误，改为problem) of opposite the pormise(拼写错误，改为promise) more serious(句子逻辑关系不明确，改为the opposite of the original promise is more serious) ,and people fail to attach attention to the "gold".Individuals and organizations can make money,take porfits(拼写错误，改为profits) and even obtain wealth by attend promise.To be honest can also have added (改为add) benefit of increasing one's knowledge,giving us a new perspective of outside world.According to a survey conducted by China Acadmy(拼写错误，改为Academy)of Science(CAS),honest can relieve not only pressure but also anxiety and such problums(拼写错误，改为problems)as depression,stress,isolation and solitude(注意句末标点)All in all,obtain(改为obtaining，一句话中只能有一个谓语动词)the promise plays a key role in our daily life.The unhonest(改为dishonest，表示“不诚实的”，没有unhonest一词), in view of the complexity of such issue,we must treat it socially,economically and culturally.with(首字母大写) a proper law,an up-to-date solutio...