美国留学个人陈述写作非常重要,个人陈述能弥补你的硬件伤,为自己的申请加分,因此常常能决定申请的成败。和留学群小编一起来看看美国留学PS被秒拒的6种开头。
一、重复简历型
I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university
点评:美国留学个人陈述不要去重复简历中的东西,这在很多学校的PS要求中明确提到,个人陈述的写作要具体到事件上,事件解决上,而不要单纯重复已有的内容。
二、学校介绍型
I am an undergraduate in…University , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China.
点评:该同学的个人陈述开头等于是一个申请学校的简介,这好像是在帮助学校做宣传,或表达你有多了解该学校,而不是写个人陈述了。这是没有意义的开头,白白浪费了字数,最容易被秒据掉。
三、抄袭句式型
As a student majoring in Computer Science, I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program. Indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, I am more than greedy for something new.
点评:Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 这种句式不知道是从哪里学到的,很多同学在用。但你要知道,老外最恨抄袭,最喜原创,所以利害关系大家想想吧。
四、救世主型
I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man's endeavor, …
点评:一副救世主的形象,小时候就受富兰克林的影响,立志改变世界。个人陈述的写作一定要个人化具体化,别吹大牛,甚至带着一种霸权主义思维。
五、犹抱琵琶型
Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical...